Poetry Critique

A Dream Within A Dream by Edgar Allan Poe
Take this kiss upon the brow!And, in parting from you now,Thus much let me avow--You are not wrong, who deem That my days have been a dream;Yet if hope has flown away In a night, or in a day,In a vision, or in none,Is it therefore the less gone?All that we see or seem Is but a dream within a dream. I stand amid the roar Of a surf-tormented shore, And I hold within my hand Grains of the golden sand--How few! yet how they creep Through my fingers to the deep,While I weep--while I weep! O God! can I not grasp Them with a tighter clasp? O God! can I not save One from the pitiless wave? Is all that we see or seem But a dream within a dream?

I chose this poem for a couple reasons. For one, Edgar Allen Poe is my favorite writer and The Raven is my favorite poem. But I also chose it because I like the idea of a dream within a dream... I mean you really have to think about it. I think I've had a dream within a dream once, when I woke up and tried to think about what the dream was I was kinda confused because there were two different ones at once. But anyways, I also like the last couple lines about carrying the sand in his hands and trying to save it from falling in the sea by grasping it tighter but he couldn't it just feel through. It's kind of like when you want some A Lot but no matter how hard you try you just can't have it because that's the way it is and instead you need learn to live with it and make the best of the situation or misfortune (which ever it may be).
I love the title because it is what made me want to read the poem in the first place. Just the title alone makes you think about all the different possibilities and practically make up a story of your own. Plus it basically summerizes what the whole poem is about... but at the same time it doesn't. It does make you wonder though.
He used rhyme in the poem which is one thing I love about Edgar Allen Poe. I love poems that rhyme, they just make the flow so smoothly and give more meaning to me. However, I do like some poems that don't rhyme, but they have to be pretty intense and have really good word choice, word placement, and a good message to make a good impression on me. He also used metaphors? Maybe personification? Talking about the sand and trying to save it? Comparing life and dreams and dreams within dreams. He uses questions to make you think but also understand the message is he trying to convey. I'm sure he uses a lot more things too but I'm running out of time. Yes, they create a feeling within the reader. Oh and by the way, another reason I like Edgar Allen Poe so much is because yes he rhymes, but he Also has incredible word choice and amazing stories/meanings.
The tone is kind of


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Whatever I want+two titles...fo sho.

New Title Numero Uno: Knowing Who I Am...And I'm Pretty Weird.
New Title Numero Two: Understanding My InnerSelf as only my InnerSelf Could Understand
New Title Numero Trois: I Know Who I Am For I Am Who I Am As Only I Can
Ideas? OPENions?

Anywhoodles.
I was in resource this morning for my first hour class and I didn't really have anything to do because I already finished all my homework so I was just sitting there and saw this book so I opened and started reading the little notes at the bottom of each page and it made me want to read the book so I started reading the book even though I don't really like reading books but that's besides the point. I started reading the book and it was pretty darn good. It's about these two boys who end up killing some people at their school who were mean to them and then shooting themselves and it talked a lot about guns and youth today and peer presure and cliques and video games and teachers and such. They wrote their suicide notes and they were pretty intense even though i haven't read it all yet because the author shows the notes a little bit through out the book and i haven't quite finished yet even though I'm about half done and oh i asked whos book it was and my teacher was just like i dont know and i asked aroudn and no one said it was theirs so i just kinda took, its a book from the library here so i'm just gonna finish it tonight and then bring it back to class tomorrow and if no one says its their i'll either return it or ask the librarian who checked it out and return it.
Hmmm... Think think think... I'm happy my dad came and talked to me. It was kinda hard not to cry though because it was pretty deep. He told me about this one time when i was younder when my step mom came home and she was really mad about something and i was in the basement and she went down to talk to me and aparently i gave her like, a really mean stare so she went up to my dad and described it as a look of pure hatred and told him to go down and spank me and it's not like he saw anything so he didn't think it was right plus i was just a little kid so she probably just mis-understood but he did it anyways and he felt really guilty about it ever since because he felt like he betrayed me and he shouldn't have so he told me about that and said he was sorry and that he was sorry for not really being there enough for me and that i could talk to him about anything i wanted to and he wouldn't tell anyone it would just be between him and i so that's pretty cool because i used to go to a therapist but with my last one my mom was always sitting in with me and i didn't really feel comfortable talking about a lot of things when she was in the room and anytime hed ask me if i wanted to have any time with just him and i said yes my mom would always question me about it and get all uptight because i wanted to talk to him about something without her being there so it ended up being kind of pointless because all we ever did was talk about stuff having to do with me and her and fixing any problems with us and she ended up saving things that bothered her about me to tell my therapist so she could h
ttyl

Personal Narrative

I was reading through my narrative and I realized that I've been writing a lot about how I am different but I hadn't really written to much about why/ how I would bring diversity to a college campus. So I've been working on making sure that people understand what i mean when i say that i know who i am and how that facts makes me a perfect candidate for a college and the people in it. It's kind of hard to explain but i'm working on it. I guess we'll have to see what other people think of it when they read it. Who knows, I might end up writing something completely different, or the same thing but in a different way. I'm not really sure, I tend to change my writing a lot after reading through it multiple times. But I think doing so makes it the best it can be, or atleast the best i can make it given the amount of time i have to write it. And there's one line in there that i'm not sure if i want to keep or not because i don't think its really relevant but it makes it sound cool but at the same time i'm not sure if people are going to understand what i mean by it because it's kind of like, a metaphor sort of and i want it to be obvious what i'm getting at.

Dealing with Difficult People

I'm currently taking psychology with Mrs. Mathers and we're making a power point based on an article of our choice about modern psychology. I chose an article called "Dealing with Difficult People" and I really like it because I agree with it very much. I think things could be added to it and it's obviously not the case for everything and everyone, but I deffinatly think that everyone can relate to it at some point in their lives. We all have to deal with difficult people, whether it be family, work related or our spouses. But I think this article diffinatly hits on some of the major things that end up happening when you deal with a difficult person. Since my boyfriend and I broke up, I realized what I did wrong with him, because he can be a very difficult person which is why I chose to do my power point on that article.

I can write more later tonight.
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Discover *Blah*

I don't really have any idea what I'm doing right now. I don't feel very good and would really just like to go home. I have a ton of stuff to carry on the bus and I Don't Wanna. I also really want to sell a lot of happenings books, and even more I want to get a job but I can't seem to do that and it sucks. I'm not having a very super day. My boyfriend and I got in a fight last
I'll continue in a second i gots ta ad my teacher and groupies.
K I'm back. Anyways. My boyfriend and I got in a fight last night so I'm all uptight and I don't know which way is up and I'm kinda get a head ache from all this loud talking but anyways I'm just going to keep writing in run on sentences because I don't really know why but I'm going to since I'm kind of already just typing anything that comes to mind, no joke. I want to go home and take a shower I feel really dirty right now and I'm not liking it at all. I guess this blogging thing won't be so bad it's just I uh... Forgot what I was going to say. For some reason I didn't like blogging last year so I've never really had a great...view? of it. Oh, and I'm not usually this boring I will actually right stuff I just have a bad headache and what not and so yeah... What? Hmmm... I really need to get a job and sell happenings books and get money somehow and start applying to colleges and start studying for the ACT again and did i mention that i have a headache? Yeah i stopped putting my i's in capital letters because it's just getting tiring. Not that i'm not already tired because I am. Oh hey look i put the i in capital letters but then i didn't again and again just now. Seriously. I feel really stupid right now because everyone's writing all this really fun, good stuff and I'm sitting here pretty much not writing anything because i'm kind of useless at this current point in time. As usual. But not really. =[ I don't wanna break up with ben. Noooooooooooooooooooo joke. I'm just tired of fighting with him. I really just realized that I complain a lot except i know i complain a lot but only when i get in this type of attitude usually i try to be pretty independent and get things done and what not. But seriously, I need to get a job. Really bad. I have no life or friends and i'm not exagurating and i did not just spell that right but i'm too out of it to go get my word speller thingy from my bag right now as you probably already know. Yesterday was semi-good because i sold quite a few happenings books around the neighborhood and told a few people with kids that i babysit but now i feel pretty useless. I would like to go home and take a shower, then mark all the important pages in the happenings books then write a list of them, color coded and seperated by family things, things for children, teens, dads, moms, etc. and i want to sell more happenings books. I want to sell lots and lots and lots and lots of them. Like a Wholeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee bunch. Because i have nothing else to do in my life right now because i'm done with all my homework and what not... I just remembered that there's free food at the cafeteria tonight for bandies but now i'm not really sure if i wanna go because i'm in such a crappy mood. I like, don't want to talk to anyone because i feel pathetic and don't want to rub it off on anyone else. Plus whenever people see you like this they always think of you as that whenever you come up again and i'm not always like this i don't even know how to describe this mood but i get in it sometimes and i never really know how to get out of it. Sometimes sleeping works, sometimes doing something progressive works, sometimes just sitting in my house looking out the window works...except then i'm not really out of the mood i'm just not thinking about it as much. I'm just... for lack of a better adjective... Blah.
Very, Very... Blah.